Talk:Christianne Shieh

Um, hey, I think the grammar and so forth in the 'Personality' section needs a tweak - you've shifted tenses from present to past for a start, and in the sentence 'She has a particular weakness for dark chocolate with nuts, so it is easy for the two to make amends. ', it is unclear who 'she' is. Also, I think clarification of '...the mildly ataxophobic Eledhwen are often at odds with each other. When that happens, ...' is necessary. When what happens, precisely? When they're at odds with each other? Or when Christianne is messy? I'm sorry to be nitpicky, but that paragraph caused a bit of a brain fuse for me and I didn't want to just horn in and edit it myself ^_^ Agenttrojie 21:31, 1 January 2009 (UTC)